Photography Project - Evaluate Instructions

The instructions for making a camera lucida are generally not well organized but still manage to give the most essential information. As soon as looking at the instructions, one gets confused as where to begin. After eventually finding the start and continuing reading, the confusion grows as one does not know what to glue together exactly. The general lack of numbered steps makes the instructions seem more complicated than necessary. While the drawings provide details for the construction of the camera, the text merely instructs the reader briefly in terms of what actions to perform. The text also does not contain a list of needed materials or tools, which would be very helpful. Another unhelpful part is that a certain David Hockney is mentioned but the reader has no idea who this is supposed to be, so it is a irrelevant information and could simply be left out. Although the text is rather confusing than helpful and although its references to the drawings are unclear, the construction of a camera lucida with the help of these instructions is generally speaking doable.

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Photography Project Description "Migrant Mother"

The black and white picture “Migrant Mother” taken by famous photographer Dorothea Lange shows a Native American woman, probably in her 30s, holding a little baby in her arms while being surrounded by two toddlers leaning against their mother’s shoulder. They are hiding their faces, be it out of sombreness, embarrassment or shyness in front of the camera. The simple, slightly ragged yet proper clothes cannot distract from the sad and sorrowful atmosphere that is created by the little family huddled tightly together outside their simple tent. Her hand’s fingertips are resting thoughtfully against her lower jaw. When closely regarding the mother’s face in detail one can see that her face has been wrinkled by raw weather and the worries of her unforgiving life. With her lined forehead and her gaze into the distance, she seems to be troubled by her and her children’s uncertain future. Despite her obvious misery there lies a certain determination and strength in her appearance, as if she was a lonely wolf mother protecting her pups from the woes of the world.

Essay Correction Link 2

http://videoabe.blogspot.co.at/2014/01/essay-corrected-corrected-version.html

Essay Correction Link

http://natisenglishadventures.blogspot.co.at/2013/12/why-republic-of-san-marino-should-not.html

Schengen Final Version

Schengen 1

The Schengen Agreement is a 1985 treaty which caused the removal of internal borders (suspension of border controls?opening of national borders?) in the EU. Since 1995 there is (MNN: has been) one single external border for all the countries in the Schengen Area instead of many national ones. That (this) means that there are no longer passport checks (check: 8.000 google hits, control: 113.000) when you cross (when crossing more formal) the border from one country which has signed the treaty to (with) another one (redundant- leave out). The Schengen Area has a common visa and asylum policy and the police forces of the countries in that area work together when (for example) a criminal (criminals sounds more generic) crosses borders.(needs changing)  Nearly all the (Almost every country in the EU) countries which are in the EU are (is also)part of the Schengen Area. Exceptions are the UK and Ireland. The UK prefers to be independent (from the Schengen agreement) and since the Irish economy depends more on the UK than the EU, it (Ireland decided to keep its free movement arrangement with the UK) would rather keep its free movement arrangement with the UK than join Schengen. Bulgaria, Romania and Cyprus are also (leave out) not part of the Schengen Area yet, because their external borders are not secure enough. Even though they (one would think that they refers to the sentence before, swap clauses) are not in the EU, Norway, Iceland, Switzerland and Liechtenstein are also part of the Schengen Area.

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The Schengen Agreement 2

In 1985, an agreement was signed by five of the ten member states of the European Economic Community, namely Belgium, France, Netherlands, West Germany and Luxembourg, in Schengen, near Luxembourg. This agreement, later known as the Schengen agreement, was set up to permit the free movement of persons within the Schengen area. It includes free travelling from one member state to another without the obligation to show (present a) the passport or identity card. However, there are two exceptions: Some countries, like Norway and Iceland, are not part of the EU but also signed the Schengen treaty. Others, such as the United Kingdom and Ireland, are part of the European Union, but do not belong to the Schengen area. One reason why these two countries disapproved of the agreement was that they fear (their fear for an ) illegal immigration if they opened their borders without any frontier controls. Additionally, the UK and Ireland had already signed a contract known as the Common Travel Area long before the Schengen agreement was set up. Ireland preferred to preserve its free movement arrangement with the UK and therefore is not in favour of signing any other treaties concerning border restrictions.

Schengen our version

The Schengen Agreement is a treaty signed in 1985 which permits the free movement of persons, goods and services within the Schengen area. Since 1995 there has been one single external border for all the countries which means that there are no passport controls when crossing the border between countries who signed the treaty. Countries within the Schengen Area have a common visa and asylum policy as well as an intertwined police work coordination in order to make collaboration easier when, for example, criminals cross borders and need to be tracked down. Almost all EU member states are part of the Schengen Area, with two exceptions, namely the UK and Ireland. The UK prefers to be independent from the Schengen agreement and since the Irish economy depends more on Great Britain than on the EU, Ireland decided to keep its free movement arrangement with the UK. Another reason why these two countries disapproved of the agreement was their worry for illegal immigration if they opened their borders without any frontier controls. Bulgaria, Romania and Cyprus are not part of the Schengen Area yet, because their external borders are considered not to be safe enough. In contrast to the UK and Ireland, Norway, Iceland, Switzerland and Liechtenstein are also part of the Schengen Area, even though they are not in the EU. In short, the Schengen Agreement enables EU citizens to move freely within the Schengen Area, which excludes Great Britain, Ireland, Bulgaria, Romania and Cyprus.

Schengen revised final version

The Schengen Agreement is a treaty signed in 1985 which permits free movement of persons, goods and services within the Schengen area. Since 1995 there has been one single external border for all its member countries which means that there are no passport controls when crossing the border between countries who signed the treaty. Countries within the Schengen Area pursue a common visa and asylum policy, as well as coordinated police work in order to make collaboration easier when, for example, criminals cross borders and need to be tracked down. Almost all EU member states are part of the Schengen Area, with two exceptions, namely the UK and Ireland. The UK prefers to be independent from the Schengen agreement and Ireland, depending mainly on the British economy, decided rather to keep its free movement agreement with Great Britain. Another reason why these two countries refused to sign the agreement was their preoccupation concerning illegal immigration if they opened their borders. Bulgaria, Romania and Cyprus are not part of the Schengen Area yet, because their external borders are considered not to be safe enough. In contrast to the UK and Ireland, Norway, Iceland, Switzerland and Liechtenstein are also part of the Schengen Area, even though they are not in the EU. In short, the Schengen Agreement enables EU citizens to move freely within the Schengen Area, which excludes Great Britain, Ireland, Bulgaria, Romania and Cyprus.

Surprising Europe - Detention Centres in the Netherlands

The treatment of refugees in the Netherlands goes beyond our imagination. The magazine “Surprising Europe” presented the unbelievable situation of African immigrants that come to the Netherlands. The interviewed prisoners in the detention centre in Zeist illustrated how they were treated badly although they are no criminals. One refugee passed through the Netherlands, intending to go to Canada but was brought to the detention centre in Zeist.

 



Alexander Dolmatov

So, the question is, why are immigrants held in detention centres in this country although they are no criminals? Refugees who are in the asylum procedure are held in these centres to be available for the Dutch government all the time. The conditions in these “prisons” vary of course, but most prisoners are treated very badly. They do not have enough time outside, no contact to their families and if they are ill there is no doctor to care for them. All kinds of resistance and protest (suicide intent, emotional reaction, not eating) lead to violence against them or they are put into an isolation cell, where the conditions seems to be even worse.
A very shocking example was the young Russian Alexander Dolmatov.  He was an anti-Putin activist and fled from imprisonment to the Netherlands. Due to complications and errors, his application was rejected and he had to stay in a detention centre where he committed suicide.

If he had been granted asylum, he would still be alive. Another example where people had to die in vain is the fire of 2005. The huge fire broke out in the Schiphol detention centre, in which 11 people were killed and 14 injured, among them also guards. The fire broke out in one of the cells but as the prisoners alarmed the guards, they were not taken seriously. When the guards finally realized the danger, they had to unlock each cell separately. By then, it was already too late for some of them.

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The Dutch immigration law is visibly a danger, rather than a support, to most refugees and this problem has to be addressed.